The Zephyros

[GhostWay]

I've started writing a "book" of sorts, titled "The <i>Zephyros</i>." It's essentially future fiction. Maybe science fiction, but I'm not sure about that. I've actually had this floating around in my brain for the last 4 months, but I decided to actually turn it into a story.<br><br>Anyways, I have the first "chapter" up. A bit short, but it's a start.<br><a href='http://www.abort-retry-ignore.net/lit/Z ... yros01.rtf' target='_blank'>Chapter 1 - Awakenings</a> [.rtf format].<br><br><br>And by the way, "Zephyros" is the Greek name for the West wind.

[Richard K Niner]

Interesting... sounds like the kind of story my father would like (he's a <i>huge</i> sci-fi fan) <!--emo&:P--><img src='http://definecynical.mancubus.net/forum ... tongue.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tongue.gif' /><!--endemo--><br><br>Looks good so far!

[Steve the Pocket]

Interesting. I can't wait to see where you go with this. Your writing style reminds me a little of my own, actually.<br><br>BTW, you wrote "Because of the possible danger this rock." That needs to be corrected. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://definecynical.mancubus.net/forum ... /smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo-->

[GhostWay]

Gah. That's what I get for writing at 3 in the morning...<br><br>Hey, creativity comes when it comes.

[Zaaphod]

Coolness. I like it so far. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://definecynical.mancubus.net/forum ... /smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--><br>

[Kles]

"Because of the possible danger this rock presented, he now ranked above the science team."<br><br>Is correct... or was it "Because of the possible danger this rock." before, simply alone?

[Muninn]

Good luck, here's hoping it turns out well.

[Supersmoke]

Good luck.<br>It sounds really good so far. <!--emo&:o--><img src='http://definecynical.mancubus.net/forum ... s/ohmy.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='ohmy.gif' /><!--endemo--><br><br>But, wow. Everyone one here is writing their own stories now. I should do something too.<br>

[Burning Sheep Productions]

Arr, it looks like it's good but this kind of sci-fi doesn't appeal to me...

[GhostWay]

WHOP-ZHO!<br><br>Just remembered about this topic. Finished chapter 2, but I'm personally dissapointed with it. I can't do decent dialouge.<br><br><a href='http://www.abort-retry-ignore.net/lit/Z ... yros02.rtf' target='_blank'>Chapter 2 (.rtf)</a>

[Zaaphod]

Sorry, can't read it. Getting an annoying "Not Found - The requested URL was not found on this server" error when I click the link.<br>

[Softpaw]

The link is a bit botched. The correct URL should be <a href='http://www.abort-retry-ignore.net/lit/Z ... yros02.rtf' target='_blank'>http://www.abort-retry-ignore.net/lit/Z ... s02.rtf</a>

[GhostWay]

Yeah, yeah. I just fixed it. That's what I get for copying the URL from another page.

[Zaaphod]

Ahh, much better....<br><br>I like it. The dialog seems fine to me. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://definecynical.mancubus.net/forum ... /smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--><br>

[GhostWay]

Oh, by the way, does anyone here happen to know offhand the order ranks in the (United States or otherwise) military? I'm not sure what they are, and the only reason I supplied a general is because I knew that rank would be fairly high up. But, since this is technically a military vessel (more details on that in later chapters), I'd appreciate it if someone out there could help me figure out the ranks. <br><br>I'd prefer not to have to make up my own ranks, but I may have to do that. Only if I can't figure out the real ones.<br><br>EDIT! Nevermind, found some information. Just need to sift through it. I will probably come up with different rank insgnias eventually. Because I don't quite appreciate the phallic backstory on some of the symbols.