My first attempt at writing punk rock lyrics...

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My first attempt at writing punk rock lyrics...

Postby ImAWaffle » Fri Mar 21, 2008 7:23 pm

For some reason, when I woke up this morning, the first words that came to my mind were "you're not a prize". And, well...

You’re not...

Pour hot oatmeal on my eyes
You’re not a prize
If they offered you on radio, the station would demise
This is worse than “Family Ties”
You’re not a prize
So get out of my cereal box and spare me all your lies

I had lunch at McDonald’s and just imagine my shame
When I peeled off the sticker and I read it was your name
I went up to the counter and I said “Now this is lame,
I’d rather have a hamburger and fries!”

YOU’RE NOT A PRIZE!

Let’s get real, please
You’re not a cheese
You didn’t come out of a cow whose name was Eloise
You make my libido freeze
You’re not a cheese
Your caseous behavior is a symptom of disease

You’ll get nowhere in life if you keep up this denial
You spend all of your evenings sitting in the dairy aisle
Getting “Kraft” tattooed on your forehead just isn’t worth your while
Besides, this stuff went out with Sixties

YOU’RE NOT A CHEESE!

You’re acting like a fool
You’re not an Edwardian Mahogany “X” Frame Stool
You just…

[Spoken]
Ah, forget it, yeah you are! There, happy now?

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Postby Baconsticks » Fri Mar 21, 2008 7:30 pm

Da [moderated for profanity]?
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Postby Ibun » Fri Mar 21, 2008 8:57 pm

First of all, genres are not determined by the lyrics, it's determined by the style and sound of the melody. Secondly, even if you were trying to write punk lyrics, it would most likely have more along the lines of some kind of social statement, rather than just throwing together random lines of rhyming words. And lastly, the lyrics suck, regardless of what you were going for.
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Postby ImAWaffle » Fri Mar 21, 2008 9:19 pm

And lastly, the lyrics suck, regardless of what you were going for.
Stupidity?

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Postby rabid_fox » Fri Mar 21, 2008 9:33 pm

Thither

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Postby Arloest » Sat Mar 22, 2008 2:07 am

First of all, genres are not determined by the lyrics, it's determined by the style and sound of the melody. Secondly, even if you were trying to write punk lyrics, it would most likely have more along the lines of some kind of social statement, rather than just throwing together random lines of rhyming words. And lastly, the lyrics suck, regardless of what you were going for.
I knew immediately when I clicked on this topic that you would reply and been all "rawr I am the music monster."

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Who sleeps shall awake, looking through the window of our lives
Waiting for the moment to arrive...
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So that we may someday understand...

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Postby Ibun » Sat Mar 22, 2008 4:15 am

First of all, genres are not determined by the lyrics, it's determined by the style and sound of the melody. Secondly, even if you were trying to write punk lyrics, it would most likely have more along the lines of some kind of social statement, rather than just throwing together random lines of rhyming words. And lastly, the lyrics suck, regardless of what you were going for.
I knew immediately when I clicked on this topic that you would reply and been all "rawr I am the music monster."

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I have a legacy to uphold. SISTER.
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Postby rabid_fox » Sat Mar 22, 2008 10:02 am

I think I've had some kind of thermal stroke in the middle of the night. The right side of my body is ridiculously cold. Nipple at full mast and fingers like a leper's.

If I'm dying, I want this song played when the revelers arrive to dance upon my cooling carcass.
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Postby nickspoon » Sat Mar 22, 2008 11:44 am

rabid_fox, that was seriously awesome. You rock.

(The lyrics are awful, I'm sorry Mr. Waffle.)
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Postby Tom Flapwell » Sat Mar 22, 2008 6:55 pm

Waffle, I think it's pretty amusing.
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Postby ImAWaffle » Tue Mar 25, 2008 9:34 pm

I suppose I should explain.

I was trying to ape "Worm Quartet", a noted synth-punk Dementia artist rather than anyone serious.

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Postby Doc Sigma » Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:23 pm

I suppose I should explain.

I was trying to ape "Worm Quartet", a noted synth-punk Dementia artist rather than anyone serious.
SO THAT EXPLAINS IT!

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Postby Rooster » Wed Mar 26, 2008 9:08 pm

If you want a punk band to be big, switch one guitar for an acoustic and sing in an Irish accent.

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Postby Ibun » Wed Mar 26, 2008 9:49 pm

What about Stiff Little Fingers?
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Postby Rooster » Wed Mar 26, 2008 11:54 pm

When did Stiff Little Fingers play acoustic on their early stuff?


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