What would improve "Raine Dog"?
I think I kinda like Raine Dog, maybe it's the British sense of it's crap but in a not terrible kind of way coming across.
But improvements;
Story arc - Plan in advance what story you want to tell, concentrate on that story until it's told along the way pick up threads for other stories.
Length - I don't mind the chapters, they are okay but have the wait between then justify the quantity (and quality) of the finished product.
Be Narrative - Show, don't tell.
But improvements;
Story arc - Plan in advance what story you want to tell, concentrate on that story until it's told along the way pick up threads for other stories.
Length - I don't mind the chapters, they are okay but have the wait between then justify the quantity (and quality) of the finished product.
Be Narrative - Show, don't tell.
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
I really, really want to like Raine Dog, because I freaking love its art style. But the story just does not interest me, and frankly I doubt it would even if it were updated more frequently.
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
I like Raine Dog's art style more than the new Ozy and Millie art style. But the writing really sucks, Raine Dog needs a PROPER storyline..
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
One thing? I don't know, now it is a great example of how NOT to write a graphic novel. One thing won't save it.
But I would have the story mapped out beforehand, not this whimsical cluster-f**k we have now
But I would have the story mapped out beforehand, not this whimsical cluster-f**k we have now
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Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
Personally, I think this strip would be a lot better if it was all released at the same time. That way, the reader's attention wouldn't be lost from the 1 month+ delay in between each strip.
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
Yeap. lulz.Yeah and I actually meant a DCer needs to make a parody strip. Like Liz perhaps. I don't think she cares enough though.
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
First we need to think of a good parody name for Raine Dog, like Mallard Swillmore to Mallard Fillmore.
Who sleeps shall awake, greeting the shadows from the sun
Who sleeps shall awake, looking through the window of our lives
Waiting for the moment to arrive...
Show us the silence in the rise,
So that we may someday understand...
Who sleeps shall awake, looking through the window of our lives
Waiting for the moment to arrive...
Show us the silence in the rise,
So that we may someday understand...
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
Pain Dog, the un-adventures of a loaf of french bread outcast from yeast based society.
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Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
Raine Dog is a partial autobiography, and the blue dog is a partial fursona, and DCS's main fursona is a blue dragon, AND DCS's old internet name was rain luong, THEREFORE I propose that the parody feature a blue dragon whose name is Dragon Luong or something similar.
Animals are usually dumb and oblivious
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
Explosions much explosions which cause massive damage to Raine Dog and make it stop
or just........naw it sucks forever
or just........naw it sucks forever
Bugger off you bastards bugger off
Bugger off you bastards bugger off
Like a heard of bloody swine who refuse to leave the trough
You'll get no more this evening so you bastards bugger off
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wOtLbwjKhOg
Bugger off you bastards bugger off
Like a heard of bloody swine who refuse to leave the trough
You'll get no more this evening so you bastards bugger off
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wOtLbwjKhOg
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Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
I want to see more of that cat, he was cool
And this jumping around really needs to stop. Pick a story and stick with it. God knows where she'll be next but it won't be with that Alpha dog, that's for sure.
Also stop making it seem like humans are so bad. We get it... can't we tell a good story without that? I mean really, a talking dog would be AWESOME! Why would anyone be angry at her or call her names or what have you? I mean I realize a talking dog isn't realistic but... still, come on.
so yeah basically what everyone else said.
And this jumping around really needs to stop. Pick a story and stick with it. God knows where she'll be next but it won't be with that Alpha dog, that's for sure.
Also stop making it seem like humans are so bad. We get it... can't we tell a good story without that? I mean really, a talking dog would be AWESOME! Why would anyone be angry at her or call her names or what have you? I mean I realize a talking dog isn't realistic but... still, come on.
so yeah basically what everyone else said.
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Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
The 90's would like to have a word with you.I mean really, a talking dog would be AWESOME!
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
Maybe Riane will leave to save her home planet, and die on the way backThe 90's would like to have a word with you.I mean really, a talking dog would be AWESOME!
Re: What would improve "Raine Dog"?
That would also improve this comic.maybe Raine will leave to save her home planet, and die on the way back
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