So Shines the Crescent Light

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So Shines the Crescent Light

Postby Tum0spoo » Tue Jun 06, 2006 8:09 pm

Crescent twilight Shines the sky
The eastern skies begin to fade
One life ends as another begins
A howl encloses the night.

The soft glow of the setting sphere
Bring a silent music
Upon the listening ear
Time goes on as darkness envelopes
So shines the crescent twilight.

Flight of day
Essence of night
A mourning youth feels sorrow
The final shade falls
Till the awakening of tomorrow.

Glimmering spots
Spread carelessly over
The hopes of the dispaired ignite
And become the blemishes on the darkness

And another great sphere
One of many faces
Comes forth this night as a smile
One that peers into the blackness
And cuts the sorrow.
So shines the crescent night.

The cold winds blast
Shattered lives past
Eastern skies light
The sleeping horizon raises it's eye
The great sphere sets hope ablaze.

The second sphere
For holding the dark
Has not to fear
The angels speak; "Hark"
So shines the crescant dawn.
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Postby Foxhound » Tue Jun 06, 2006 8:11 pm

nice writing. very good.
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Postby Tavis » Wed Jun 07, 2006 1:09 pm

Very well written poetry Tum0spoo. There are a few typos, but you have made some beautiful imagery.

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Postby Muninn » Wed Jun 07, 2006 3:49 pm

The rhythm was a little off at places, but mostly it was good.

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Postby Tum0spoo » Sat Jun 10, 2006 4:17 am

Very well written poetry Tum0spoo. There are a few typos, but you have made some beautiful imagery.
Altered it a bit and fixed the typos I saw. Sadly I copied the whole thing from the paper I wrote it on so the typos were because of actual typing. I'm rather proud of this work. It's not often I write, but when I do it's pretty good.
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